Shorter affirmations can work fine, however in this case I strongly recommend using a longer one as I had written here.

I write this here, because there is significant power in creating what can be considered a "verse", where each sentence opens up the next.
Spoken while in a light trance, with deep visualization, it creates a much stronger effect than a generic short affirmation.

The key here being that one needs time to fully immerse in the words, and that specific words are used which trigger visualizations in the mind.
If you would rather suggest people use your shorter affirmation as an example, you do not understand the purpose of this post here.

Next time I will delete such replies, because the purpose here is rather to provide something extra that ordinary SS do not really know or use, and anyone posting here with what they think is the norm is nothing more than detracting from the technique I intent to employ or teach.

Whatever I will share here, will be to my best ability what I know to be powerful. Since I know about short affirmations also, if a short one is best, it will be posted, or if a short one is alternative, it will also be posted if it makes sense to use an alternative.

I deleted it because I see why your affirmation is better. I personally would use a shorter one because it takes more than 5 minutes to receit that 10 times, but I like the structure of it.

Can I use this affirmation for moon square and Venus square?

Yes you can.